Here’s a shortened version that keeps the emotional weight and key plot points intact:
It was the first warm day of spring — the kind that makes you open all the windows. The breeze smelled like lilacs and thawed earth, like the world was waking up.
Just after noon, Laura’s red car pulled into the driveway. She stepped out, sunglasses too big for her face, sunflower tote in hand.
“There she is,” I said, smiling.
“Hey, stranger,” she called, and we hugged like no time had passed — though it had been four years.
Inside, the air smelled like cinnamon. I introduced her to Ethan, who looked up from his recliner. Their handshake was polite, but something unspoken passed between them — a flicker of familiarity.
I brushed it off.
Laura and I spent the afternoon baking and laughing. Ethan stayed in the garage — typical of him.
That night, we watched a crime show. Laura sat on the rug, Ethan in his chair, me on the couch. It felt easy. Almost normal.
Until the chips.
Crunch. Crunch. Crunch.
Ethan twitched. His knee bounced. Then he snapped — slammed his hand on the chair. “I told you not to do that!”
Laura froze.
“What?” I asked.
They fumbled for excuses, claiming it was coincidence — the shared pet peeve, the awkward tension. But I saw how they looked at each other.
Later, when Ethan left abruptly for “work,” something in me cracked. I followed him. He didn’t go to work.
He went to a café. Laura was already there. They smiled when they saw each other.
It wasn’t chance. It was planned.
I drove home in silence. I cried hard. Then I packed.
When Ethan came home, I confronted him.
“You lied. I saw you with her.”
“It’s not what you think—”
“I saw enough.”
I left. Drove until I found a motel. The life I knew had shattered.
Then, a knock.
It was Laura. Eyes red. “I love him,” she said. “But I need you to know the truth.”
They had a history — before me. She left him back then. He never knew why.
“When I saw him again, I realized what I gave up. I tried, but he said no. He loves you,” she said. “I needed you to know.”
I sat down, words sinking deep.
“I missed my chance,” she whispered. “Don’t miss yours.”
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