Here’s a shorter version that keeps all the emotional beats and plot twists intact, but trims the word count significantly:
I’ve always been Nick’s biggest supporter. We met six years ago at a friend’s barbecue—he won me over with terrible dad jokes and ’90s pop culture trivia. A year later, we were married and settled into a rhythm. He worked as a graphic designer, I ran a small bookstore, and our evenings were filled with conversation, laughter, and dreams of a future.
When Nick turned 34, he started talking about doing something meaningful before 35. I suggested Europe—he chose a marathon. Soon he was training every Saturday with a group. He’d come home glowing, full of stories about his running buddies, Jake and Chris.
Then, one Thursday, Nick forgot his phone. While folding laundry, it rang—and I picked it up.
“Hi! Your daughter’s not feeling well and needs to be picked up,” said a woman on the line.
I froze. Daughter? The call ended quickly, but I couldn’t shake the panic. I checked his call log—there were multiple calls to Parkview Elementary. A school.
We’d talked about kids someday, but never now. My mind spiraled. Could Nick have a secret child?
That Saturday, I pretended to sleep in, then followed him. He drove to the park—just like he said. Jake and Chris were real. They ran together, joked, stretched. I began to feel ridiculous… until a little girl and a woman appeared. One runner broke away, and the girl screamed, “Daddy!”—to him, not Nick.
Relief hit hard.
That night, I told Nick everything. The call, the spying, my suspicions. He laughed. Turned out Jake had used Nick’s phone to call his daughter’s school after a run—his phone had died. The school system saved Nick’s number by mistake.
Now, every Saturday before he leaves, Nick jokes, “Off to see my secret family!”
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